What I did well
- Nuanced analysis of some things
- Researching the cultural context of references such as Bible quotes
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What to do instead / Details |
Conventions of essay writing
- No first person
- Don’t use simple connectives like “firstly”
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- Use connectives that establish relationships between paragraphs e.g. “in contrast”
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Structure / organisation
- Don’t write the IO like 2 separate analyses
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Intro structure
- Introduce the issue
- Introduce the body of work (not just name but intro to content)
- Contextualise extracts within greater body of work (also in analysis)
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| Adding nuance to analysis |
- Consider different possible analyses / perspectives
- The narrator and poet don’t always have the same views or perspective
- Unpack imagery used by looking at the cultural connotations of the object(s) individually, not just how they’re used in the text
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| Improving IO bullet notes |
- More bullet notes needed on how to structure intro, conclusion
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| Don’t treat the two extract analyses as separate essays |
Unsure how I could do this, will ask my teacher |
| More analytical or impactful phrasing of topic sentence |
Unsure how I could do this, will ask my teacher |
