Reflection 1:
- How might you use a thesis statement to provide the effect of the visual and lexical element of the text?
Use a thesis statement to provide the effect of ideas and how it has an impact on the reader. Big ideas (concepts) and themes are important to mention. They need to be rather larger ideas such as consumerism rather than surface-level things such as the “car”.
2. How might you embed evidence and unpack to avoid simply describing the text?
Use multiple pieces of evidence and go beyond just “describing” it. Provide insight relates to the context (author, themes, concerns, implications, and assumptions), purpose. Link to the big ideas (in thesis strands). Rather than just saying this “this draws the reader’s attention” or “this has an effect”, I need to link it insight, implications, context, or assumptions.
Look at thesis strands one by one, focusing and gathering as much evidence as possible. Additionally, looking at each thesis strand and all the evidence that is available to unpack at a deeper level (insight). The thesis strands need to be larger and be able to go further in insight. Planning is a very important aspect and in exam conditions, using the preparation time more properly. Applying my prior knowledge and understanding as well.
My planning has changed as I am more focused on the preparation and looking at each thesis stands as a bigger idea. Additionally, it is important to make sure that the thesis strands are not so similar.
I am making changes so I can give more insight into a better focus.
Reflection 2:
I have decided to change my body of work from P&G advertisements to Portrait of the Artist as Filipino as I feel there is a better grasp on Portrait. During the planning stage, I made sure to meticulously organize my notes from class and consolidate all the information. I used context documents, articles, classwork, and the notes from my booklet to create possible structured broad arguments that can be my thesis strands. From my notes, I have used major themes/concerns that can be my thesis stands of “Traditional” vs “Modern”. From these thesis strands, I have tried to narrow down some points that can have supporting evidence. I looked through my booklet and tried to make sure to choose well selected and diverse pieces of evidence. Now, I am trying to unpack and construct a deeper analysis whilst linking back to my arguments. Another important thing I need to do is to make sure there is a smooth flow of cause and effect in this structured essay.
I need to construct my structure and points for how the coexistence causes the conflict, and perhaps what the conflict should look like?