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The Arts can manipulate one’s perception of personal knowledge

An example of a manipulative piece of art is the Soviet Montage Theory. Sergei M. Eisenstein contrasted an image of a man with a coffin, a man with a bowl of soup, and a man with a lady laying suggestively. The reactions from the audience claimed that the man looked sad, hungry, and lustful respectively to the situations, they applauded him with his ability to express so much emotion. In reality, the image of the man was the exact same every time. This is using montage as a motivation to convey emotion and motivate edits to allow for one to feel like they connect with the emotions felt on screen.

The Shepard’s Tone is an auditory illusion that seems to continuously rise and rise though it doesn’t. It consists of three scales, an octave apart, where the highest decreases in volume, and the lowest increases in volume, whilst the middle one stays the same.

One that goes against any manipulation is Andy Warhol’s everything. His message was, “in the future, everyone in the world will be famous for 15 minutes,” and his art was taken at face value. The man wanted to prove that there didn’t need to be a deeper meaning for the art to be ridiculously popular. His famous Campbell Soup Cans are so iconically him and there is no reason to it. Warhol even made a film called “Sleep” that features five hours and 20 minutes of John Giorno sleeping. Painstakingly pointless and still existent.

Learning Outcomes Service

I would say that I am good with people, especially those that I do not know yet. I am able to meet people and develop a relationship or at least a kinship with them through listening and relaying back. The unforeseen difficulty here as I came to realize is that traditional communication is a challenge to overcome. However, I do understand that that should not limit the amount that I can connect with our clients. I have never worked with any organization in Tampines MINDS or any other MINDS organisation and so far I realized that our organization will be more to understand as we push through. So far we have seen the clients where they go on their day to day. We have not formally met them but the atmosphere was interesting and I look forward to forming connections.

I understand the importance of punctuality and how others rely on us so we must be on our best. I think this is how it is most shown. I like that I can see who I am helping and the people’s smiles.

 

The Importance of a Play From 100 Years Back

“…Wilde benefits from a mode of presentation that already emphasizes the difficulty of distinguishing substance from surface.”

The importance of being earnest is as relevant today as it was over 100 years ago. discuss.

Wilde uses his characters to demonstrate the spectrum to which they value substance over surface. Lady Bracknell, for example, seems to value surface and how no matter what else you are as long as you are something she wants you to be then it is fine in her eyes. This was demonstrated through the scene in which she grills Jack of his past and his personal life. She doesn’t ask for a story, just a yes or no which added to humour as we know it doesn’t mean much as things can entail different reasonings. Today we see the news and many accusations and rebuttals in celebrity or political controversies. The titled article doesn’t have to sway the audience one way because even if all the facts are plainly laid out, the specific facts show only one side of the story, disregarding most anything else. His benefit leads to humour and is relevant in this time, however the

tampines minds yoga cas reflection 1

For know what we have done is our research and basic due diligence on adding to our prior knowledge prior to actually working with our partners. The work in which we all collaborated on includes what Tampines MINDS is all about and their own work and programs, as well as knowing more about those we are helping and in which ways we can help them. The group is very self-conscious in the aspect that we want to make the experience the best we can for our partners and put them first. It will be long until we actually meet them but the point stands that we still need to know much about how they function and how we can prioritise their needs without isolating them. Each is different and we will learn as we go to build a relationship as yoga therapy is quite intimate in its nature.

drink less coffee to be more emotionally intelligent

I think that emotional intelligence and the testing of EQ is a debatable topic as the reasoning behind the tests are obscure. Of course, if they are publisized then people might change to give themselves a higher score if that is what they want to achieve instead of getting a genuine score. There are lists, however, of behaviours that many intelligent people have and if you can identify with many of these characteristics then it is very likely to have a emotional intelligence. Two that I particularly identify with are the embrace of change and the difficulty to offend.

 

What those who know me don’t know but those who do, don’t.

“Think about the diagram below and how your identity might appear different at times, and what you reveal to people and when. Perhaps some things you are still finding out about yourself too, or your values might change and shift as you have new experiences.”

I think that I change quite frequently. Not to the degree where a  long lost friend would not recognize me but in developing different aspects of me the older ones wither away. I used to be somewhat introverted and not socially adept, and one day as I moved schools I somehow just decided to be more outgoing. That stuck with me. I seem to prefer having to endure the pressures of judgement in conversing with human beings rather than not knowing them at all. My realization in accordance with the things that I experience always roots from something that I’ve always been. My mother told me that when I was little, around 5 years old living in Korea, I went out to the playground with my friends one day and came back riding a bike without training wheels. It seems like instead of new experiences shifting my personality, I decide on some identity and conform to it. Whether this is the most effective method for anything and everything, however, is highly debatable.

The things that I reveal to someone depend on our situation. I have moved many a time, 7 countries, 10 schools, to be exact, and realize that on a surface level I do change. I need to shift the view of what I see in the mirror to help me develop as a person. If the reason behind this is due to watching too much pokemon or not is still to be known.

There are aspects of me that random strangers assume to be true. I have dyed hair, there is bound to be assumptions made surrounding how people react to it. Of course, I have no control over it. However, in hindsight, I did realize that it was for attention, yes, the cliche. Mostly because in every school I went to I would be mixed up with some other oriental Asian girl with medium length black hair and dark glasses. In my head, I value individuality as well as my ancestry. The things I chose to wear or change about myself do reflect my inner image, everything’s there serving a purpose.

This idea of purpose does tie into my idea of the things I share. I do feel somewhat close with my family as they know things about me that others don’t, things I do not have to tell them but is inherently known by families just because of that relationship. In that regard, I do not expect them to know everything either. My interactions with other people, however, do compromise of things I tell them and facts about myself that my family don’t know or don’t ask to know. I think that the level of temporariness in that I usually leave schools after a year or so affect my ability to care much about what other people think of me. But since I’m staying at one school until I graduate, which is the longest time I’ve been in a school (4 years), I found that I don’t mind things being out in the open. It helps for things to be clear.

answering questions on an article with the most provoking title of the three proposed

https://www.nytimes.com/2015/08/09/fashion/a-millennials-guide-to-kissing.html

  • What is revealed about the author?
  • How does the writer develop sense of self and their world?

In this article by Emma Court, she recounts moments where she recognizes her generations detachment between what could be considered physically intimate moments and real emotional intimacy. Court was 21 in 2015 and belongs to the millennial generation. Her account of ‘hookup culture’ relates to something that has happened with the idea of love and the ideation of loving. Her attraction to a virtual stranger on a plane through the pre and post events of their kiss reads like a cheesy Top Best Romance book. She then has a situation that juxtaposes the strangers-turned-lovers cliche. The pair of them part ways, literally, and it is revealed the lingering strings from a one-off circumstance. She represents the questioning behind what flirting means and how far it goes, physically and emotionally. Her realistic approach to the situation showed the things a rom-com movie doesn’t. She wouldn’t leave her life as a senior in college in New York for a sophomore in North Carolina just because of the events on a plane. He had settled that by parting ways in a final ‘see you never.’ But in this world by our fingertips, never is a short time. Court found him on Facebook and tapped a simple button that sent her into a turmoil of emotions. Some virtual virtual stranger now had the power to make her question so much. It is a reality in her world, this current one.

The prospect of intimacy has changed. The sense of self-worth in regards to how others deem your worth has become somewhat less important unless they have political power over you. The lack of permanence and ever-changing circumstances create a desire for permanent change. Everything needs to move on quickly and is so easy to do so in this consequence-less reality.

Oh, Maths.

My name is Clarice and I have just completed IGCSE Mathematics in this past year. I always associate curiosity and confusion with maths. As a restless kid, my dad would teach me some maths in the middle of the night, or at 9 pm which I thought was late being 6. It always intrigued me but I now find myself being confused every so often because I don’t understand enough. I’m excited that I got to chose this course as I like the proof part of maths, the how, the why. I think I like to work things out myself when I understand a concept but have someone explain it to me when it is new territory. When I am stuck I tend to concentrate too hard on the problem so I let it sit for a while and get back to it. In maths, I think my biggest skill is inquiring, not only for things I don’t understand but also about associating concepts. My biggest area of focus in the short term would be to be more organised and in the long term would be to be more self-disciplined. 

the KNOW in knowledge

Religious knowledge is often based on a spiritual being with historical roots based on a higher power; this knowledge can be disputed amongst the masses but individual experiences define individual religious beliefs whether widely proven or not.

Historical knowledge relies on the recounting or retelling of prior events, especially in the time periods before the invention of the camera. There are many different means of recording, through writing or the spoken word, and so could distort over generations and so vary on reliability.

Knowledge in instinct roots in evolution. The natural drive to survive created different means of doing so and as such allowed those with the primal intuition to survive as animals; however, as we develop as humans those instincts remain and are oftentimes present in situations where they are not needed and act with more harm than good.