GENERAL
1 The question is important.
2 Introduce the text, have broad enough topic sentence, don’t overcomplicate.
3 Words count word counts, balance
4 Format quotations correctly, choose enough but not too much
5 Speak out of an experts mouth, not too much, and also read other relevant texts
SPECIFIC TO ME
feedback
1 Use link back to the line of inquiry so that there is a clear link throughout the writing.
3 Write more, expand on things
4 Remember to add a bibliography and engage with the quotes
Reread it out loud. Address the question.
commendations
Great secondary sources, valid points.
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