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1.How might you use the PEA structure more effectively to avoid describing/narrating ?
understand the text clearly before starting to analyse.
be concise on stating “Point” – “Evidence” and then “Analyse”.
When analysing, remember to answer “to what effect?” – meaning how can you show analysis more and further in depth? to what you have already analysed a bit. What is the effect of having eg: high angle? why does it make them look powerful?
Answer “so what?”
Do not state or use points and evidence that does not provide more analysis – that will eventually go into description.
2. How might you use your thesis to organise your ideas to BUILD arguments?
unpack and analyse in the form of:
Make sure to be able to identity 1 or 2 themes when reading and understanding the text.
Identify 2 or 3 thesis strands that supports the main themes and then use PEA.
Build your analysis by developing your points and ideas.
3. How might you read more carefully for implied meaning by using visual or verbal word choices?
read the text 2 to 3 times to understand the text while also unpacking the visual and lexical elements.
for comic strips – read texts beyond class
focus on the choices of word used in the text – analyse “why did they use that?” “how does that impact the understanding of the text?”
looking into character vs characterisation
if there is a character shown in the text, then there should be something that the characters represent or symbolise.
find out what do the characters represent or symbolise? –> what is contrasting, ironic, humorous, exaggerating? within the characters and their actions or thoughts?
Do the representation of characters have any impact on society? on the readers?
Read essays written by others – to see what necessary changes i might need to make
practise more comic strip and political text type paper 1 – with the feedbacks implied
study the different text types, possible features and vocabularies of those text types that I can use in my essay.
learn how to unpack visual and lexical elements more.
Look into the work choice used by the author and its impact on the readers?
With lot of practises and preparation with my classmates, I felt confident about doing my IO. However, since I came back home and could not go back to Singapore, I decided to do my IO remotely. Thinking about doing IO online was one of the biggest challenges I faced during the online learning period. Firstly, I was worried since it was my first time and secondly, I worried about technical difficulties which could occur anytime during the timed session. Nevertheless, everything was well organised from the school side and I made sure to keep myself connected to stronger internet connection without any distractions. This made my 15 minutes of IO very smooth without any problems.
Completing my IO was one of the biggest achievements during the stressful remote learning and at the same time, I have learnt a lot during two months of preparation put into my work. I have learnt not only how to compare different types of texts but also how to deeply unpack and analyse the text while also making intertextuality of the contexts. This has helped me to get ideas for my HL essay and in real life applications.
With the help of outline and information from the padlet, I was able to identify key ideas that I needed to talk about. Although we were on remote learning at that time, some of my friends and I who took similar text types were able to come together and help each other by sharing our thesis and main ideas while also correcting the mistakes or vague points we found in each others’ outline. I think this made me feel more confident about my preparation and the main ideas that I outlined to talk about.
My main theme was to analyse and unpack how the identity is affected by the societal norms and expectations in both literature and non-literature text while also emphasising the significance of their background and context of the text.
Identity in Novel:
Identity is affected by society
Gender identity is affected by cultural expectation gender roles
Society values limit identity – not being able to make their own decisions
Identity is affected by society
Identity is influenced by economic role in society
I began to plan my IO ideas and which relevant texts I can choose as soon as possible so that I can start planning and even if i needed to change any of the texts, then I would still have more time to prepare. I organised all of my notes for all the literature and non-literature texts that we covered in class in a padlet to make it easier for myself to choice pairs.
Padlet link – https://padlet.com/yangd1034881/zwctmku0pwb8
At first, I chose to do Women’s world and one of the adverts we studied in the class but I could not find one that I felt more comfortable to talk about and match the ideas with Women’s world. Therefore, after talking with my teacher, I picked the pages from Women’s world where it talked about the loss of identity of Roy and I tried to match with one of the photos of Dorothea Lange that I felt confident with.
I decided to choose:
Women’s world by Graham Rawle – page 264 as literature text
Photographs by Dorothea lange – “White Angle breadline San Francisco 1993. – Non-literature
As the sessions were conducted, we were introduced to more interesting facts about the Alumni Foundation and how they have been keeping up with their activities every year while still connecting with many other alumnus. For instance, I found it very fun and unique when we took photos of how we would look like or where we see ourselves in 10 years from now. At first, I didn’t get why we were taking photo right now for something that we would take only after 10 years but I came to realise that it was for our reunion, our memories and featuring our diverse cultural backgrounds which made me feel fascinated.
Career week was another activity that I found it very fun and engaging. Even though we had career week last year in grade 11, a lot of things and my plan for what I want to study in college have changed so at that time and this time I was exploring my new interests in the area of Aerospace engineering. Since I recently found out about my interest in Aerospace engineering, I was hoping to get to talk with other people who have studied Aerospace engineering or who had the similar interest as mine. Fortunately, career week was around and when we were given the opportunity to choose our own interest of area to go as a Grade 12 student facilitator, I took advantage of it and was able to attend/facilitate two Alumni sessions in the area of Aerospace engineering. I have learned skills in taking lead as the facilitator even though I was very nervous but at the same time, because of my interests in wanting to get to know more about Aerospace engineering along with other grade 10s and 11s, my nervousness turned into excitement. I am very thankful for giving us this opportunity to get to know and connect with our East Alumni and helping on our way to college life. I look forward to learn and engage in more activities in the future sessions.
Being able to continue softball after all the challenges we had to face in 2019 was the best thing. Due to restrictions, I thought we won’t be able to play any of the sports I like but I was very happy to join softball again. Even though we didn’t get to train and the play a lot last year, I was at least able to develop my skills and performance as beginner which developed my interest in wanting to learn more this year.
During the first two sessions (2020), in just short period of time, I have started to improve my weak skills which were mainly the batting and body posture while still maintaining high stability in the lower body part after batting. I have come to realise my weaknesses which hindered my performance in softball in the second session when we practised developing skills on batting. While there are still many areas where I really need practise to improve my performance, the session on batting skills have given me motivation and passion to learn, develop and improve my skills and performance in the future. I look forward to upcoming training and practise sessions.
How might you provide a clear thesis statement connected to themes, a clearly related topic sentence, and a building of ideas?
one of the key point missing in my essay was establishment of one main thematic idea where my all thesis strands point out to. Also providing a concluding statement that links to my theme/idea while also making sure that it connects to my next idea in the next paragraph.
How might you avoid simple description/summary?
Use and stick to Point, Evidence, Analysis to avoid description.
Do not provide statement without providing any evidence and evaluation.
How might you avoid making historical or cultural comments and assumptions? – reference to a main theme/idea?
By providing more evidence and evaluating the points by focusing on the main thematic idea.
Backup assumptions with evidence to unpack and make statement stronger.
Unpacking evidence and analysing rather than making assumptions with weak points.
I will be mainly using the feedback I got from my teacher for the first draft to improve my final essay. Applying all the discussions and changes that I needed to make for thesis strands and thematic ideas will be put into the final essay for better written work.
Main things I need to work on:
work on introduction properly. – follow the feedback
use of literary technique?
how can you stay organised with the structure?
point out specific thesis strands in the beginning of the paragraph
backup all thesis strands using PEA
avoid making assumptions and historical comments – not too much
need a concluding statement after every paragraph that connects to the idea/theme and also connecting to the idea that you are going to talk about in the next paragraph.
need an overall one “Theme” that your essay is focusing on.
need to show how “so what”– how does this portrayal of women connect to a theme? without this, becomes description/summary