Paper 2 准备

范文

老师评语

1.本篇卷二论文的结构有什么特点?

结构清晰完整

层次清晰

中有转折承上启下却不偏题也不打破结构

一连串的分析赏析之后最后归于总结

2.本篇卷二论文在对文本主题内容的理解与诠释方面有哪些可取之处

理解主题内容后,联想并分析各个作品

紧扣主题同时发展文笔

3. 划出本篇论文对所评论文本文学手法的评论

“巨树”的意象,承接“水声”“清香”而来……

分析细腻得体恰当

转折承接上下文的用句“不仅……而且”之类的

4. 与自己平日所写文章相对比,本文在语言方面有哪些可以借鉴之处

自己写文章, 有些条理不清晰,分不清专业用于之类的区别和什么时候在哪里用什么词合适,比如说“伏笔”和“铺垫”之类的,运用语言不太恰当。一开始写赏析是顺着写下来,没有什么结构可言,甚至可能偏题。后来会围绕着主题走但是不够细节化,重点经常放错。有的时候只专注于用词表面美之类的而不贴合实际,仿佛是自己在写文章而不是赏析别人的文章。

  • 需要学会巧妙正确地运用专业用语
  • 用词准确恰当贴合实际
  • 不偏题
  • 适当发展文笔

 

CAS#9

International Women’s day

Why is equality such an important issue?

-Gender equality has always been a problem. Although it has been improved a lot, it still has not changed the thinking of some people’s gender inequality. Women and girls occupy half of the world’s population and therefore also the world’s potential
half of the force. But nowadays, gender inequality is widespread, and it can stagnate social progress. Gender equality can bring economic development, promote development, and the process of achieving gender equality is also a process of human social progress.

In terms of group nature, it is a fact that men are stronger than women because women have worse physical strength than men and are less aggressive than men. This is physiologically determined, not prejudice. Just because of a person’s gender, they will be treated unfairly, and this unfairness is more serious for women.

In terms of values, justice is our ultimate pursuit. Equal treatment is not equal to justice. If only men and women’s toilets are set in the same place, women’s toilets have to be lined up. This is not equal. In the case of equality, when men and women have the same amount of food in the famine, men are hungry, which is not fair. Equality is not justice. We can never stop at equality and give up our efforts in the direction of justice.

CAS#6

100 days in 100 words—What’s your win?

Because of the course selection, I have learned a lot of new knowledge, such as psychology and design technology which are all very interesting and very helpful for the future. Probably I would like to say I improve language skills a bit more, like the term of using appropriate grammar, use of professional terms, etc.

 

Animation reflection(LO5)

This is the video I recorded for the final product we created during animation activity time, we used the tag tool app on Ipad to make an animation based on the topic- Christmas. Our aim was to design and create a background for the school music event, the main theme was Christmas so in the video, you can see Santa and snowman sort of things. In the video, the scene was after the music event, we reflected the animation on the big wall of our school main gate so that visitors and guests could see the drawing after they had a wonderful experience in the music show.

Dance showcase 2020 reflection (LO1)

This year I joined the dance showcase again with 4 different dances-

  • Grease
  • Saturday night fever
  • Aladdin
  • Footloose

This year’s theme is movie, the background music and themes for all the dances are from classic movies of different eras, such as Aladdin and singing in the rain.

In the picture on the left, it is a dance movement in Grease shot by the photographer, and it is also a picture of me showing my full face in the dance showcase.

 

What previous experience have I had with an activity like this?

  • I joined dance showcase and culturama before, Culturama allows each person to choose only one dance. Danceshowcase allows each person to do as many dances as they are interested in, showing off their charm.

What would I like to improve?

  • Because I chose more than 1 dance, sometimes the practise time would come at the same time which means I have to make a choice between whether go to the first dance or attend the second one, I would be absent from some dances, so I would miss the parts and the position that I was supposed to do. Maybe next time I will try to arrange my time so that I won’t miss so many practise time.