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1.How might you use the PEA structure more effectively to avoid describing/narrating ?
understand the text clearly before starting to analyse.
be concise on stating “Point” – “Evidence” and then “Analyse”.
When analysing, remember to answer “to what effect?” – meaning how can you show analysis more and further in depth? to what you have already analysed a bit. What is the effect of having eg: high angle? why does it make them look powerful?
Answer “so what?”
Do not state or use points and evidence that does not provide more analysis – that will eventually go into description.
2. How might you use your thesis to organise your ideas to BUILD arguments?
unpack and analyse in the form of:
Make sure to be able to identity 1 or 2 themes when reading and understanding the text.
Identify 2 or 3 thesis strands that supports the main themes and then use PEA.
Build your analysis by developing your points and ideas.
3. How might you read more carefully for implied meaning by using visual or verbal word choices?
read the text 2 to 3 times to understand the text while also unpacking the visual and lexical elements.
for comic strips – read texts beyond class
focus on the choices of word used in the text – analyse “why did they use that?” “how does that impact the understanding of the text?”
looking into character vs characterisation
if there is a character shown in the text, then there should be something that the characters represent or symbolise.
find out what do the characters represent or symbolise? –> what is contrasting, ironic, humorous, exaggerating? within the characters and their actions or thoughts?
Do the representation of characters have any impact on society? on the readers?
Read essays written by others – to see what necessary changes i might need to make
practise more comic strip and political text type paper 1 – with the feedbacks implied
study the different text types, possible features and vocabularies of those text types that I can use in my essay.
learn how to unpack visual and lexical elements more.
Look into the work choice used by the author and its impact on the readers?
With lot of practises and preparation with my classmates, I felt confident about doing my IO. However, since I came back home and could not go back to Singapore, I decided to do my IO remotely. Thinking about doing IO online was one of the biggest challenges I faced during the online learning period. Firstly, I was worried since it was my first time and secondly, I worried about technical difficulties which could occur anytime during the timed session. Nevertheless, everything was well organised from the school side and I made sure to keep myself connected to stronger internet connection without any distractions. This made my 15 minutes of IO very smooth without any problems.
Completing my IO was one of the biggest achievements during the stressful remote learning and at the same time, I have learnt a lot during two months of preparation put into my work. I have learnt not only how to compare different types of texts but also how to deeply unpack and analyse the text while also making intertextuality of the contexts. This has helped me to get ideas for my HL essay and in real life applications.
With the help of outline and information from the padlet, I was able to identify key ideas that I needed to talk about. Although we were on remote learning at that time, some of my friends and I who took similar text types were able to come together and help each other by sharing our thesis and main ideas while also correcting the mistakes or vague points we found in each others’ outline. I think this made me feel more confident about my preparation and the main ideas that I outlined to talk about.
My main theme was to analyse and unpack how the identity is affected by the societal norms and expectations in both literature and non-literature text while also emphasising the significance of their background and context of the text.
Identity in Novel:
Identity is affected by society
Gender identity is affected by cultural expectation gender roles
Society values limit identity – not being able to make their own decisions
Identity is affected by society
Identity is influenced by economic role in society
I began to plan my IO ideas and which relevant texts I can choose as soon as possible so that I can start planning and even if i needed to change any of the texts, then I would still have more time to prepare. I organised all of my notes for all the literature and non-literature texts that we covered in class in a padlet to make it easier for myself to choice pairs.
Padlet link – https://padlet.com/yangd1034881/zwctmku0pwb8
At first, I chose to do Women’s world and one of the adverts we studied in the class but I could not find one that I felt more comfortable to talk about and match the ideas with Women’s world. Therefore, after talking with my teacher, I picked the pages from Women’s world where it talked about the loss of identity of Roy and I tried to match with one of the photos of Dorothea Lange that I felt confident with.
I decided to choose:
Women’s world by Graham Rawle – page 264 as literature text
Photographs by Dorothea lange – “White Angle breadline San Francisco 1993. – Non-literature
How might you provide a clear thesis statement connected to themes, a clearly related topic sentence, and a building of ideas?
one of the key point missing in my essay was establishment of one main thematic idea where my all thesis strands point out to. Also providing a concluding statement that links to my theme/idea while also making sure that it connects to my next idea in the next paragraph.
How might you avoid simple description/summary?
Use and stick to Point, Evidence, Analysis to avoid description.
Do not provide statement without providing any evidence and evaluation.
How might you avoid making historical or cultural comments and assumptions? – reference to a main theme/idea?
By providing more evidence and evaluating the points by focusing on the main thematic idea.
Backup assumptions with evidence to unpack and make statement stronger.
Unpacking evidence and analysing rather than making assumptions with weak points.
I will be mainly using the feedback I got from my teacher for the first draft to improve my final essay. Applying all the discussions and changes that I needed to make for thesis strands and thematic ideas will be put into the final essay for better written work.
Main things I need to work on:
work on introduction properly. – follow the feedback
use of literary technique?
how can you stay organised with the structure?
point out specific thesis strands in the beginning of the paragraph
backup all thesis strands using PEA
avoid making assumptions and historical comments – not too much
need a concluding statement after every paragraph that connects to the idea/theme and also connecting to the idea that you are going to talk about in the next paragraph.
need an overall one “Theme” that your essay is focusing on.
need to show how “so what”– how does this portrayal of women connect to a theme? without this, becomes description/summary
In the beginning of my essay planning, my initial topic sentences were to focus on how in different ways women in the novel were represented by the author and how it connects with the Japanese society historically and even now.
My previous topic sentences and ideas were;
Topic sentence 1 – how are female characters represented ? (strong, powerful, weak, moving towards modernisation, holding on to culture etc)
Topic sentence 2 – Predominant male character representation (Kikuji) – how does he think and act with different female characters in the novel with different intension and traditional values.
Topic sentence 3- Weak women are more subordinate.
My topic sentences were not very focused and I found my ideas floating all around. When I did research and tried to find evidences to support my statements from the text, there was very less of them and I found myself researching and looking into the ideas of how women were simply presented in the book which were clearly visible to the readers as well and thus I felt my topic sentences did not make my arguments stronger.
However, after talking with my friends and teacher, I came to focus my topic sentences. While my main thesis idea is still the same as how women are represented in the novel but I would be focusing on only the idea about the different levels of subordinate women representation by the author and their insights.
Initial Topic Sentence:
Representation of woman as less subordinate. (Chikako)
Representation of woman as very subordinate (Mrs.Ota)
Representation of woman who could fall under being a subordinate but one that pushes the factors affecting her to be submissive away (Fumiko)
With this initial topic sentences, I can focus my idea on one concept and at the same time refer my evidences from the whole body of book (Thousand Cranes).
How might you use precise terminology to unpack the text more effectively?
Note down the specific terminologies that I think are relevant to the text while stating evidence for that during the planning time since I forget to use them when I am nervous at the beginning of writing.
Practise use of terminologies before tests to get used to it and on how to use/apply them.
How might you unpack the verbal and visual elements of the text to derive more plausible arguments and clearer insights?
Use Point, Evidence and Evaluation
identify carefully what kind of text/prompt it is in order to use specific and relevant visual and lexical elements.
Study the role played by male/female characters in the text.
You put yourself in the audience’s shoe and imagine what it could mean to you.
how are different gender identity represented in the text? why? how?
Rule of thirds – break and analyse- supported by evidence
Angel, shot and framing composition
Use of characters – male vs female – if relevant connecting to resistant reading
Placement/ representation of social classes
Verbal or lexical elements
Fonts – size
Repetition of phrases
Ethos? Pathos? Logos? → Identify them and show why?how?
–> I began my English language and literature HL essay planning earlier and quickly in order to get more ideas and do more research on it. My first idea was on writing the essay based on the significance of preserving tea ceremony as part of Japanese culture and tradition and the consequences of not respecting it as I thought it was one of the open and main motif of the novel. However, as I started researching and reading more hidden messages in the novel, I found how the author represented woman’s role in the novel quite interesting and fun. After getting this idea, I was able to research on how Japan has always put heavy responsibilities on preserving their culture since the first world war and restrictions for women in the society which helped me to connect my idea from the novel to how women should/must be represented in the society. Additionally, watching the class video on “Deciphering Japan” by journalist Yumi Araki on “Japanese Identity” and “the role of women” helped me to focus my idea on my line of inquiry “How does Kawabata Yasunari represent women in Thousand Cranes?”