What can I improve this time?

• Develop a thesis in the introduction
• Add and develop topic sentence to better fit the thesis
• Connect the points together (make the essay less disjointed)

Introduction: Langston Hughes was an African American poet, who was raised in New York. Growing up in Harlem throughout the 1920s to the 1960s, Hughes was able to see first-hand how racial discrimination impoverished communities and the social impacts which were caused by blatant segregation. His focus on the lives of black and white America, and focusing on black culture and identities are a key motif repeated in his poetry. His first and most iconic poem, “The Negro speaks of Rivers” drafted in 1921, speaks to the African American community, connecting it back to its roots and heritage in the African sub-continent. “The Weary Blues” written in 1926 encapsulates the Harlem renaissance by expressing the emotions and feelings that Blues carry.