One thing done well:
“The third, one line stanza, emphasises the contrast of his connection to home against his lived experiences – and just as the lengths of the stanzas are contrasted, the “weeks of hesitating” are matched against the “seconds” of the phone call.”
Citation of text as well as explanation done smoothly – covering structure as well as the words used.
One thing done not so well:
“In the transition to the last stanza, we see the migrant consider the difference in seasons in giving him clothes “weighed down by wool” – a move once again from the macro scale details of his memories to the small details of his present reality”
Awkwardly explained, missed some of the key ideas of unfamiliarity of clothes/weather, didn’t mention structural ideas like alliteration.
