https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e-Hx1H4BoELZnIMozOJ90tZStB4832D5uxunEcL5ARo/edit?usp=sharing
Comments:
- Teacher’s comments: Forgot to talk about or mention lineation; sometimes need clarification on points
- Challenges: deciding on how to organise topics of body paragraphs and relate them to theme of kindness and beauty
- Personal notes: For body paragraph 3, I should switch the last sentence with the topic sentence because it’s much more clearer whereas my original topic sentence was a bit messy and made more sense after I finished showing all my evidence; I spent around three days planning out and writing the essay, and most of the time went into organising concepts and deciding what evidence to use from my notes and what I should keep out; need to work on time management
