In my extended essay, I think I get the main point of of this essay, and I got to phase it is a good way. However, I need to put more focus on my argument in order to support my main point. I should proof read my work after I have done it. I was writing a sociology related for my extended essay. My topic is ‘’Was changing family structure more relevant than workplace participation in addressing gender inequality in post-war America.’’. The topic that I am doing is different with I thought. However, after having a discussing with teacher I feel like I am more confident with taking this topic to write an essay. Within the essay, I do much research and combine the information and graphs that I found in Google to make an essay. Also, I do put my opinion in it. I do express my personal thought in it at the very end of paragraph. Through this essay, I got to know more about how women lives within the period of post-war America. I was quite in to it, and I am looking forward to do this kind of extended essay in the future.