Final Decision:

After the discussion with my teacher and brainstorming ideas with my friends regarding my HL Essay, I decided to re-write most of my HL essay. Initially, I chose two texts from Always and Gillette. For Always analysis, I chose to re-write parts of the paragraphs while giving pieces of evidence to further support my claims. I provided more images to support my thesis and added more analysis as I took out the irrelevant claims that did not support my thesis strands. I also tried to link the paragraphs with a broader idea or theme every time I end a paragraph. The same goes for Gillette analysis. I changed almost all of my evidence and made new claims. After changing all of them, I prove-read all of them again and submitted the final essay.

Overall, I was satisfied with my new changes and glad that I was able to submit it in time!